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Saturday, November 11, 2006I had great difficulty reading Pneumonia Before Antibiotics. The prose is overly complicated. Some sentences contain up to 93 words. Others, I simply could not understand: "Instead [Finland] countered with a deterministic methodology dependent — rather than on comparisons of mortality tables — on individually rationalizing each of an expected efficacious therapy's failures." Good editing, which one would have expected from Johns Hopkins University Press, should have corrected such problems, removed elaborate phrases (such as "paradigmatic example" and "positivistically pardoned"), and eliminated mixed metaphors ("Sulfapyridine's arrival was thus less a tornado sweeping away the rabbit warrens than a driving, steady breeze altering the murky therapeutic waters"). I'd like to see a diagram of that 93 word sentence. posted by Sydney on 11/11/2006 08:27:00 PM 0 comments 0 Comments: |
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